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advertisement are becoming more and more common. it is positive and negative developmen?t

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In recent years, Advertising is gaining more popularity on the
markerting
the exchange of goods for an agreed sum of money
marketing
 products and services. While advertisements are considered to be
advantege
giving an advantage
advantageous
advantaged
, they have numerous negative influences. It is questionable that advertising
bring
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brings
 many benefits not only for individuals but
also
 for businesses.
First
, By expanding the scale of advertising in almost kinds of mass media, It provides a diversity of employment opportunities.
In other words
, Many forms of
advertisement
is
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are
 likely to generate occupation for artists or copywriter in designing logos, content and ideal for
advertisement
. Another advantage is that advertisements help company
bring
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brings
 messages involved
on
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with
 products to reach
potential customer
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a potential customer
the potential customer
potential customers
,
this
 is a priority strategy to trigger consumer buy their products.
Finally
, advertising help people
rasie
raise the level or amount of something
raise
reuse
aweareness
having knowledge of
awareness
awarenesses
 and
knowldge
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
 about product development, thanks to advertisements, consumer can be kept informed about newly
lauched
set up or found
launched
 products, making them have much more shopping choices.
However
,
advertisement
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the advertisement
havse
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has
have
 several positive influences
to
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of
 human life.
First
, A large number of items that do not ensure about the quality are advertised on commercial channels, consumer could experience the feeling of confusion, making more trouble selecting on their taste.
Second
,
advertisement
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the advertisement
 makes people buy items that they do can not really need. Apple corporation is a typical example. They use marketing and advertising to attract a massive customer to buy their product,
as a result
, younger people are willing pay a large money to own the lasted version of the phone,
although
 their old phone function still well. In conclusion, based on the above the mentioned explanation. Individuals could bring both benefits and drawback through the growing of prevalence advertising
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