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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are bet or that they find the most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, as an education is changing day by day many of new subjects are being introduced to educational institutes.
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, many people think that students should give attention to a particular prone or a subject which they are interested in. Some kind of people is of opinion that they should importance to each and every type of subjects. Well, both of the view should be considered as important but it all depend on the student what they want to focus on a particular conditional or not.
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, as per the educational changes on yearly basis many of the susceptible syllabus changes or difficulty level increases or decreases, some people or parents of the children believes that children should give concentration to the subjects in which they like to give more importance to it, like it could be subjects like sciences, social studies or mathematics, because people believes that by obtaining these subjects they can do anything in their life after completing their school academics they can choose selected stream in which they want to give more focus.
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, some persons or parents believe that they should give focus on each and every subject. Teenagers should be attentive to each and every prone, but not on a particular prone in institute because by doing
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 they can develop their mind physically, mentally and socially too. In many school physically training subject should be given more importance, so that teenagers can be mentally plus physically fit. In my opinion, according to me teenagers should concentrate on all the subjects in the institute because by doing
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 they will grow their mind in every particular aspect.
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  • career prospects
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  • motivation
  • engagement
  • achievement
  • specialization
  • in-depth expertise
  • emotional and psychological well-being
  • satisfaction
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  • personal and professional fulfillment
  • tailor
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  • broad curriculum
  • compromise
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