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In many countries in the world, some people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for the country. Others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is generally believed that a part of society in many countries worldwide receive
amount
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an amount
 of
many
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
 in a high
rate
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 every month. Some of the community
assume
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assumes
is assumed
 it as a good thing for the nation, but the others think that
salary
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 which is higher than a certain level should be banned by the government. Even though the both sides can be right, I consider
my self
reflexive form of "me"
myself
 to stand for the
first
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 opinion. The
rate
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 of
salary
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 can
shows
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show
 how
prosper
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prospers
 the nation. The higher monthly fees for workers can be interpreted that the company
have
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has
 enough
profit which
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profit, which
 means the businesses are going well and the income of the country is fairly good. Take the comparison of
salary
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 in Indonesia and Australia as an example,
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 worker in Indonesia gets only around 0.7 AUD in an hour whilst Australian can earn more or less 5 AUD.
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, higher
salary
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 is a good thing because it is usually followed by high
rate
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 of tax as well. The more money allocation as a tax is better because it can be managed to improve public service for the people. It can be felt in
Australia where
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Australia, where
 the tax is well processed
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 public transport improvement which will ease the society to travel.
On the other hand
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,
salary
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 amount above the average level can lead into consumerism. People who earn more money than usual tend to have
desire
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a desire
the desire
 to own
the better
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the best
 quality of things or branded stuffs so that they can spend a
tons
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ton
 of money to purchase them. Overall, people can say that the government should
managed
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manage
salary
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rate
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, but in my opinion, higher income can be a good sign for country's economic status.
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