People should look after their health as a duty to the society they live in rather than personal benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Good
health
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is a basic human need. The statement says that people should look after their
health
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as an obligation to the
society
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and not think about their own benefits. I
however
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feel that compliance would be much more if we were to look after our
health
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for our own interest and the benefits to the
society
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would automatically ensue. There are many benefits to the individual if he/she looks after his/her
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health
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healthy
. Good
health
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means a person leads a quality life. He does not have to spend on expensive medical treatment and he has
more productive life
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a more productive life
. He can work better and enjoy all the good things that life has to offer.
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, if a person suffers from any infectious disease and takes timely
treatment
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treatment, then
then
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he does not spread it to others. Later on he does not stand the chance of getting re-infected by other people.
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, it cannot be denied that as a part of
society
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, we all have an obligation to the
society
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. If all people are
healthy
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healthy, then
then
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the
society
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is
also
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healthy. A healthy
society
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means that the government does not have to spend a lot on
health
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. All those saved resources could be used to improve the lives of people
further
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.
Government
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The government
could spend on latest diagnostic machines and on gyms and on educating people as to how they could look after themselves even better. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
that we should all look after our
health
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. It does not matter whether it is for ourselves or the
society
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. We are all inextricably linked to the
society
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. If we do something good for ourselves, the
society
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is benefitted and if we do something for
society
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then
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we are benefitted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • duty
  • well-being
  • burden
  • healthcare systems
  • productive
  • economy
  • example
  • empower
  • informed choices
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