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People should look after their health as a duty to the society they live in rather than personal benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Good
health
 is a basic human need. The statement says that people should look after their
health
 as an obligation to the
society
 and not think about their own benefits. I
however
 feel that compliance would be much more if we were to look after our
health
 for our own interest and the benefits to the
society
 would automatically ensue. There are many benefits to the individual if he/she looks after his/her
health
Suggestion
healthy
. Good
health
 means a person leads a quality life. He does not have to spend on expensive medical treatment and he has
more productive life
Suggestion
a more productive life
. He can work better and enjoy all the good things that life has to offer.
Moreover
, if a person suffers from any infectious disease and takes timely
treatment
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treatment, then
then
 he does not spread it to others. Later on he does not stand the chance of getting re-infected by other people.
On the other hand
, it cannot be denied that as a part of
society
, we all have an obligation to the
society
. If all people are
healthy
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healthy, then
then
 the
society
 is
also
 healthy. A healthy
society
 means that the government does not have to spend a lot on
health
. All those saved resources could be used to improve the lives of people
further
.
Government
Suggestion
The government
 could spend on latest diagnostic machines and on gyms and on educating people as to how they could look after themselves even better. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that we should all look after our
health
. It does not matter whether it is for ourselves or the
society
. We are all inextricably linked to the
society
. If we do something good for ourselves, the
society
 is benefitted and if we do something for
society
then
 we are benefitted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • duty
  • well-being
  • burden
  • healthcare systems
  • productive
  • economy
  • example
  • empower
  • informed choices
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