Parents put lot of pressure on children to succeed. Do you think this is a good or bad thing?

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Nowadays parents
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are forcing
their children to succeed.
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has increased due to more competition and parents are worried that their children might be left out.
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will provide the logical conclusion. Putting pressure on children can have many harmful effects
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as they can get depressed and face mental health issues
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Every child has own level of intelligence and own ways to work
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Success doesn't matter if the person is not happy.
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can be beneficial as children will work
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harder
and try their best to succeed
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They know they have no other choice so they don't waste their time and pay attention to their studies so that they become successful in future. On balance, I think it has more benefits as compared to its drawbacks as a child should be encouraged to succeed and try it's
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will benefit the child the most in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic excellence
  • extracurricular activities
  • prosperous future
  • societal standards
  • peer competition
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • unfulfilled ambitions
  • resource availability
  • opportunity exploitation
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