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Some students take a year off between school and University to work or travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#students #year #school #university #work #travel #outweigh
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Education in any
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 demands commitment and hard
work
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, especially at
university
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level
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. A
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 of students struggle to be successful at
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level
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 and few students take a
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 break to study and
work
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 or travel. They argue that before finishing the education
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 leads them to explore themselves and
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world
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the world
. Some people argue that taking a
year
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 off is not good for their educational career and I don't agree with them and I will explain why in
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 essay with some examples. We need some experience in our lives either it may be at
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 or in dealing with
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world
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a world
 before facing it.
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 will comes from working at
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level
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 or travelling. We can do them at the time of our lives, but few students take a
year
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 off to their school or
university
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 to do it. It gives them a chance to explore their strengths and weaknesses. They face the
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 in real time. It's
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 a good chance for them to escape from the stress and think
inovatively
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. I met a guy in flight, who is a
university
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 student, took a
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 break in his studies. He said he worked for 6 months, earned enough money to travel and started exploring different countries and cultures. By the time we met, he travelled three countries and flying to
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 country in his bucket list. He stated that
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 experience changed him a
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. Exploring different cultures made to explore himself and it gave him a
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 of confidence that he can handle any type of situation. I felt so happy about him. Some people argue that taking
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year
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a year
 off is not that good for your career, they think that
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 can disconnect you with the subjects you learned so far which leads to poor performance in the coming semesters.
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 is not completely true and
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 completely false. Taking a
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 gap in your education may be makes to forget the subjects or changes your understanding towards the subject, but
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 happens very rarely. Students without commitments may face it, but those types of students never dare to take a
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 off because of the fear. Few claim that taking a
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 off may be pushes you back in
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 competitive
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 and that's not true, because if you have talent it is easy to prove yourself anywhere at anytime. To conclude, there are a
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 of advantages of taking a
year
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 off from school to
work
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 or travel, but one should know how to balance it with the education.
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