Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally . Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people believe that environmental problems and
issues
must be negotiated on an international scale
while
others oppose and think that it is better to evaluate them nationally.
Although
it is believed by some that it is better to answer
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complication nationwide, I opine that it is far better to involve the developed
countries
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the issue as most of them have already tackled the issue. The concerned authorities and organizations, who are the councils of environmental
issues
, must take adequate steps and measures to resolve these
issues
globally rather than domestically. On one hand, certain groups of people believe that environmental
issues
should be resolved domestically.
For instance
, the country can plan to take a survey of various places of its country which are threat to mass pollution
,
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and take the right steps to alleviate the problem.
In the
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international survey conducted by Indonesia
has
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revealed that
countries
that dealt with environmental
issues
nationally
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developed immensely as they have
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prerequisite to tackle the
issues
.
Therefore
, it is recommended that
countries
take
the
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control of
this
issue themselves, as
this
will assist them in improving
this
skill.
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to
this
, some believe that all environmental
issues
must be discussed globally in order to explicitly and critically understand the matter and conciliate with other developed
countries
to reduce the increasing number of environmental problems.
For example
, it has been seen that if more developed
countries
conciliate
together with
the
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developing
countries
, the circumstances can change rapidly and phenomenally. The developed
countries
can even offer funds to non-industrialised
countries
to reduce
issues
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.
Subsequently
, many experts believe that will aid all the developing and developed
countries
. In conclusion, world pollution and environmental problems have become a worldwide phenomenon and all
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countries
must hold their hands together to undermine the subject from the roots. I believe it will not only eradicate the affair but
also
help the non-developed
countries
to mitigate the problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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