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Some systems require students to speacialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school? What are the benefits of two education systems and what is better ?

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Although
 it is observed that in some fields, students need to be specialized in little variety of subjects from the certain age, other systems have various subjects to be in place for students when they are in
school
. There are advantages of the both systems,
however
, according to me, a wide selection of subjects for children is better as it provides more several options for teenagers for their future. To commence with, it has been seen that students who are in
school
 have more subjects to learn as they are not enough mature when it comes to the selection of the subjects for their career.
Therefore
, In
school
 level, students have exercised
subject
, physics, maths, history and so on as at the early stage they can enhance sufficient knowledge of each
subject
. In a result, when students move towards higher secondary
school
, they have one aim to focus.
However
, when students do have limited subjects to choose for their career when they turn fifteen, they have just a few subjects to learn.
Consequently
, students can concentrate more rather wide variety of
subject
Suggestion
subjects
 which are not useful in their particular field.
For example
, if students select information technology field after
school
, they need to concentrate on how they can be mastered on
this
subject
 rather thinking of other fields at the same time. In conclusion, while there are some benefits of the education with limited range of subjects, a wide selection of subjects is helpful not only for their academic life but
also
 for their future career.
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