In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food

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Approaching health issues in some countries, it’s common to

trait

something considered choice to eat

treat

it with excessive junk

food

consumed by

society

. Some people thought that by increasing

tax

Suggestion

taxes

on those foods they would be able to deal with the issue. I disagree that

this

is the best way to solve the

problem

Firstly

, increasing the

tax

on fast

food

wouldn’t stop

society

from consuming it. For those people who afford to buy, they will just consume them as usual with no big deal. But, for those who can’t really afford it, they would just run into other substitutes, which has no difference from consuming fast

food

(Instance of consuming canned

food

, frozen

food

etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

). The major health

problem

will keep

Suggestion

will be keeping

sticking in the country. Even worse, the cause of the

problem

can be added by excessive substitute

food

eaten by

society

That is

exactly not the result hoped

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from

countries dealing with

this

kind of situation. Another thing to consider is that the higher

tax

could be an extra burden for

society

. They could not freely enjoy the

food

as usual. Even for

food

, they would need to struggle more, there’s no prosperity among

society

. While welfare is everything that

society

needs and what every country is reaching for.

In addition

, people have their own reasons and situations why they choose to consume fast

food

than other consumables. They have the right to consume what they want, it would be unfair for those lower middle class to deal with the changes. In conclusion, increasing

tax

on fast

food

would cause another similar

problem

to the country and even worse, it could mentally hit the people

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with

the extra burden carried by them and prosperity-

laking

inadequate in amount or degree

lacking

among people.

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public health
obesity
diabetes
heart disease
health outcomes
healthcare costs
consumer behavior
socio-economic backgrounds
ethical implications
public health campaigns
subsidies
regulations
nutritional content
healthier food options
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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food

Fully explain your ideas

Health services are a basic necessity. However, private companies have made them quite costly for ordinary individuals. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh its disadvantages?

The title "I had to show courage." Describe a circumstance where you had to exercise courage. What action of yours required a lot of bravery? Afterwards, did you feel proud of yourself? How did your surroundings respond?

We should fix the traffic and transportation by making everyone lives in the cities not suburbs or countrysides. What to extent do you agree or disagree?

'People who do not use social media networks* will always fall behind in career development opportunities.' To what extent do you feel that this is an accurate and important prediction? * Social media networks = messaging and information exchange systems such as Facebook and Twitter.

Too much emphasis to given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activity of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?