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People say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work. Do you agree or disagree and give your opinion

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I am highly agreed with
this
 statement because nothing comes our way without
hardwork be
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hard work, be
hard work be
 it even food or our daily needs
.
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.
 It is well said that "you cannot climb the ladder of success with your hands in the pocket". My upcoming paragraphs will frame my agreement with
this
 statement way more efficiently. To commence with, the majority of people are not gifted with power it is the self belief of
they
objective case of they
them
 can do it attitude and putting their 100 percent with their hard work that's what makes them successful. I am not saying capability is not significant, but the thing is in order to retrieve expertise once should
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perform
 hard
first with
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first, with
 time and practising their craft every single day
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that's
 what makes them talented at one point in their life.
Secondly
, as we have been educated with the fact from our parents and educators throughout our life that the universe only conspires for us and give us ability to reach our goal when we effort hard and display it the scenario of our worth. In a recent survey, studies have shown that as well our neuron cells start getting so sharpen when
we
of or belonging to us
our
 task hard and they make us to be destined to success. On the other side, Some individuals are so gifted that with the minimum efforts in their life they always reach to the top. Nobody can not be denied about the facts related to genetics, for, example, some of the greatest athlete
usain
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Usain
 bolt and his coach once admitted the fact that he is naturally talented athlete and even with his less
hardwork
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hard work
 he is destined to be on top. To sum up, there's a saying that one can beat the capacity with hard work, but it is impossible to beat the hard work with just capability so there are no other alternatives to the one who has the quest to be successful has to perform hard or they will wind up getting failed miserably.
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