The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Health is one of the most vital aspect
for
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of
every individual. As a proverb says "Health is wealth", it is on the par of the individuals to take care of their well-being. A school of thought assumes that in the near future, the standard of health of the citizens in the country would decrease compared to the present scenario. I strongly agree with the statement,
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, there is a possibility of
improvement regards
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improvement in regards
to health over decades. To embark with, pollution is a worrisome issue in the contemporary world
today
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because is it
causing
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causes
is causing
hazardous effects on the humans. Due to rising global warming and greenhouse
effect there
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effect, there
is a wide ranges diseases affecting people ranging from respiratory diseases to gastrointestinal tract problems.People inhale the toxic substances liberated to the atmosphere and acquire diseases like asthma and breathing difficulties which in chronic leads to fatal conditions.
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, the toxic waste products liberated by the factories contaminate both land and water leading to
diarrhea
frequent and watery bowel movements; can be a symptom of infection or food poisoning or colitis or a gastrointestinal tumor
diarrhoea
and a lot more.
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, the most recent tragedy in Vishakapatnam, more than 500 people lost their lives due to the dangerous gas released from the renowned factory.
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, if the pollution is not controlled adequately
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definitely a downfall would be
experienced regards
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experienced in regards
to the fitness of the citizen. It is
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significant how people are into their sedentary lifestyle in the modern era. People are more inclined towards the fast food and packed products. They are not bothered to eat healthy rather they are preferring taste and ready to eat consumables available at their doorsteps making their lives easier. People
are not realizing
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don't realize
do not realize
the effect of junk food on their body in
long term
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the long term
. To illustrate, obesity is the rising issue in the western world
today
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and the reason goes to the type of cuisine members are opting
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.
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, it is impacting on an individual's body tremendously over the years. To recapitulate
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the two most stemming issues putting down the average standard of people's health goes to the ongoing pollution and the sedentary lifestyle chosen by most of the world's population
today
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. I strongly feel there is a need to take stringent actions to curb
this
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problem. If
not there
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not, there
is a high probability of a decline in the well-being of the individuals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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