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The most effective way to solve traffic problems in the cities is to encourage people from suburbs or the countryside to live in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#traffic #cities #people #suburbs #countryside
No one can deny the fact that most of the cities across the world
is struggling
Suggestion
are struggling
 with traffic problems. Some opine that shifting of populace from the outskirts to the indoors of the region can curb the problem, but I
disgaree
be of different opinions
disagree
 with
this
 view completely.
This
 essay will explain why it's a catastrophe to move them.
Firstly
, urban areas
are already battilng
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is already battling
are already battling
are already betting
are already voting
 with
over growth rate
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an over growth rate
the over growth rate
 of
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 residents.
Inaddition
Suggestion
In addition
 to
this
, bring more citizens from the rural or nearby areas will add chaos to the existing troubles like rent hike, adequate facilities of water, health and education.
For instance
, a
resarch
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
researcher
 from the Harvard mentioned that 95% of the
metropiltans
relating to or characteristic of a metropolis
metropolitans
metropolitan
 are already overcrowded by 40% extra in 2015.
Hence
,
this
 will only lead to more imbalances in the regions. The crucial factor for
rise
Suggestion
the rise
a rise
 in the traffic issues is because of lack of infrastructure and proper facilities. Public transportation in many places is either short or in a unusable way. Road
conidtions
the prevailing context that influences the performance or the outcome of a process
conditions
 in major areas are in a dangerous situation. A study found that the current mobility related infrastructure in 90% urban places was sufficient fifteen years ago.
This
 conveys that we should focus on improving the highways and buses, metros and trams,
etcetra
. To conclude, we are facing serious issues in the city traffic.
Also
, shifting of the people from other communities to within would only damage in other ways and has nothing to do with the problem. Effective solution for
this
 is proper planning, maintenance of roadways and public transportation services.
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