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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument.

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There is an increasing
use
 of
technology
 devices like tablets, PDA and laptops inside the classroom. As per the
first
belief
Accept comma addition
belief, this
this
technology
 has
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of implications in the field of learning.
However
, others believe that if suffer from down side associated
to
Suggestion
with
 the usage of modern equipment
this
 essay will discuss Merits and demerits of computers in
education
. IT is clear that
use
Suggestion
the use
 of
technology
 in
education
 will create
good
Suggestion
better
 impact. Using internet along with
technology
 can help individuals accessed more information as per their needs.
Moreover
, learners have
ability
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the ability
 to learn and research on any topic which they want to learn. And it has been agreed that
technology
 is very good for
education
. Many people disagree and feel that
use
 of
technology
 can reduce real human
interaction
. Human
interaction
 helps to exchange knowledge and empathy with each other. Despite of human
interaction
 still possible through
use
 of Skype, Facebook and Google Hangouts. In conclusion
technology
 benefits people in learning,
education
 and corporate sector.
However
, it
also
 limits the real human
interaction
.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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