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Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientists, people are not changing their life style. Why is this the case? What could be done to encourage the people to save the environment?

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Although
 the scientists were concerned about the environmental issues which are rising rapidly, people still busy with their own schedule without worrying about it. If
this
 situation stays,
next genaration
Suggestion
the next generation
next generation
next generations
 of the people would not see the fossil fuels and many other facilities that we use in our daily lives. In my opinion, the governments ought to foster citizen to implement solar systems to save energy. To commence with, having busy schedules, people nowadays forget about a pivotal environmental concern.
In addition
, in
this
 modern era, the use of vehicles becomes high and individuals have vehicles so that they can reach their workplace easily.
However
, vehicles produce more emissions and it causes environmental issues which in
long term
Suggestion
the long term
, people are going to face the issue. Not only people damage the environment by increasing the use of vehicles, but industries
also
 add fume to the air and raising the concerns. To overcome
this
 issue, the government should work with industries and foster them to add sufficient filters before fume go out the air.
Furthermore
, it not only government`s duties to keep the environment clean, but individuals
also
 provide an ample contribution by implementing solar panels at home to generate electricity. By doing
this
, national authorities could save the energy for the future generation. Apart from
this
, government ought to work with the private transport companies, which provide private transportation to the public, to lower their ticket prices.
Consequently
, people can travel conveniently with cheaper rates. In conclusion, while scientist are watching environmental issues very carefully and suggesting appropriate ways to overcome the concerns, it is
also
 individual duties to change the lifestyles and support the government.
Thus
, we could keep our environment neat and clean.
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