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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Food
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 is generally known to be an important part of our day to day lives. Some countries may choose to
plants
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plant
 their crops themselves and others might opt for the importation of
food
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 items.
Although
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 some individuals agree that eating home grown foodstuffs are beneficial, others disagree. In my opinion, I agree that the drawbacks of bringing in
food
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 from other places
supersedes
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supersede
 the benefits. There are some significant advantages of
food
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 importation to a community.
Firstly
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, the speedy
availability agricultural
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availability, agricultural
 products when needed is crucial for human survival.
For instance
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, it is faster to buy mangos than
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plant
 it, nurture it and wait for harvesting.
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, shipping plants from another location makes
variety
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a variety
 of produce accessible. Some essential agricultural produce
do not grow
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does not grow
 in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 part of the world
as a result
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 of humidity or soil texture. Because of
this
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, nations are pushed to import various
type
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types
 of
food
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 items to provide options for its citizens.
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, despite the importance of purchasing farm goods from an international farmer, it still has its disadvantages. It takes a while for a harvested produce to get to its final destination and these can affect the taste and freshness of the goods. Agricultural outputs are more satisfying health wise when they are consumed immediately after harvesting in order to gain from all the nutrients.
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, Bananas can ripen before it gets to the store for purchasing thereby reducing its life span.
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, the cost of import duties can be challenging and tasking on the economy. In conclusion, buying
food
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 produced in a foreign land can be good and
bad but
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bad, but
 the drawbacks
is
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are
 more than the reward especially when it comes to health.
Submitted by Mustafa Salem on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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