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Modern technology is now very common in most workplaces. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

In recent years, with the improvement of
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, modern
technology
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 is now very common and be applied in most workplaces. Without a doubt,
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 has changed the way we
work
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 in many aspects. In my opinion, it does have some disadvantages since people are too relying on
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.
First
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 of all,
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 makes our
work
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 more efficient and convenient. It can be used
to replaces
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to replace
 some
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 used done by humans. Since humans are easy to make
mistakes but
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mistakes, but
 the robots are not in some kind of jobs,
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 as the production line in factories. The mechanical arms in the production line can do faster than humans,
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, it is not easy to make mistakes.
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,
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also
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 makes our
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 convenient. People can deal with business, like making phone calls or meetings, anywhere and anytime or even can remote working around the world. Take myself as an example, I am a data engineer. All the data of
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the company
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are
 on the cloud. Only need a laptop or even a smartphone,
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 I can
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 anywhere with internet.
However
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,
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 has
also
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 brought some disadvantages since people are too relying on
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.
Sometimes without
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Sometimes, without
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, many jobs cannot be done. As the example of myself, if without internet, I cannot do any analysis or programming. Meanwhile, people lose the skills of some jobs gradually which are
done
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 by modern
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 today.
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, the furniture industry used to be handmade.
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, with the improvement of
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, qualified workers are replaced by the machine. In conclusion,
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benefit
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benefits
 our
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 in many ways.
Nevertheless
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, it
also
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 brought some disadvantages. As we are too relying on it, we may lose some special skills and don't know how to live without it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • software applications
  • high-speed internet
  • communication
  • collaboration
  • geographical boundaries
  • remote work
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • skill gaps
  • job displacement
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • dependency
  • security risks
  • data breaches
  • cyber attacks
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