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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions on this?

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In line with the shift in time, a recent phenomenon on the tourism of citizens indicates some concerns in terms of problems for international tourists.
This
 essay will elaborate on some probable causes and positive solutions which can improve
this
 situation. There are some widespread reasons why local people consider that tourists who are from other countries would have some negative impacts on their societies.
Firstly
, the consciousness of tourists about saving the environment of the country where they visit is seen as the main reason,
for example
, some foreign tourists often draw their marks on the wall in historical places like temple or museum as well as litter beautiful landscapes
such
 as famous beaches.
Secondly
, nowadays some tourists take advantage from visiting another country to stay illegally.
For instance
, there are a large number of people from developing countries travel to South Korean nowadays, and their purpose is to reside without being accepted immigration, so it would be complicated for the government of the country to manipulate illegal immigrants.
Subsequently
, some measures should be implemented to deal with these issues of international tourism. It is necessary for the host countries being strict to tourism agencies about ensuring that they would not let their customers commit any unfit behaviour which is mentioned above by giving some strict rules.
For example
, the financial and prison punishments for tourists who lack awareness should be implemented. Another remedy is that local people, especially youngsters can participate in some volunteer activities to introduce the beauty of their culture and landscape to tourists, so the visitors have more respect for the place they visit. In conclusion, by conducting some positive solutions to resolve common negative belief of the local people,
this
 situation would be better.
Submitted by Trinh Vuong on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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