Some people think that sending criminal to prison is not effective. Education and job training should be used instead.

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Incarceration is one of the main forms of punishment for the commission of felony, the question related to the effectiveness of
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practice has become a hot debated topic recent year. Other believe that providing education and training is a better way. Both sides have merits and demerits and I think we should deal with lawbreakers largely depends upon the age and the type of
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
. Education and training are more effective for offenders who are young or when the crime are
misdemeanors
a crime less serious than a felony
misdemeanours
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action will give them a chance to be a better citizen of
society
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. If people who commit crime in their teenage are sent to jail, they will probably be released by mid thirty, the prime working age. With years serving prison time, they will lose the opportunity to be trained or educated. As a results ex-convicts have limited unemployment option and become a drag to the community.
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,
misdemeanor
a crime less serious than a felony
misdemeanour
happen
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happens
mostly due to the lack of the general knowledge. As a matter of
facts there
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facts, there
are not many compulsory legal courses in school and university. By enlightening them properly,
society
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can lower the chance of
reoffences
a remark that calls attention to something or someone
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.
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, certain crimes must result in prison in order to protect the well-being of the
society
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. Serious cases involving homicides aggravated assault are best dealt by locking up in the prison to prevent
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losses. They might get trained or
educated but
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educated, but
better be kept away from the
society
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. Drug traffickers and
arm
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dealers are even more dangerous. These people are beyond redemption and should serve maximum sentences. There is no use in trying to educate and train
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group. Prison is the best deterrent for their actions. In conclusion, both methods have upside and downside. We should strive for the appropriate actions that reduces any future harms. Opportunities should be given to the young as well as the inexperienced one while dangerous criminal should be heavily punished.
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