Being a celebrity – such as a movie star or professional athlete – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or drawbacks?
Fame offers several advantages and disadvantages to a renowned person's
life
. The famous personalities receive popularity and a luxurious life
, however
, it takes away their personal life
and keep
them under constant pressure Change the verb form
keeps
due to
many different reasons. In my opinion
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opinion,
the
Stardom has more limitations than advantages.Correct article usage
apply
Thus
, this
essay will discuss that
why being famous has more drawbacks.
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Firstly
a famous person such
as an actor or actress will gain millions of fans after obtaining popularity. This
is to say that, they feel important and loved by numerous people
, and it will bring happiness and a sense of achievement to their life
. However
, they can never live a normal life
owing to the never ending
curiosity of the common Add a hyphen
never-ending
people
about the social and private lives of celebrities. As a consequence
, they are mostly surrounded by fake friends who are just there to gather information about the life
of a celebrity. Hence
, the pleasure gained initially
does not last
longer and may become a major cause of stress for them. To exemplify, Shruti Khanna, a popular playback singer in India, took her life
in 2002 after the spread of various rumours about her personal life
.
Similarly
popular Add a comma
Similarly,
people
may live an extravagant life
, as they earn a huge amount of money in their profession. In other words
, they can own every expensive thing in the world to have a comfortable lifestyle. On the other hand
, they are assumed to be perfect under every circumstance, by their fans. Moreover
, to maintain this
fan following, celebrities are always under pressure to look presentable every time. What is more, they are judged for each and every move they make either in public or in their private life
. Therefore
, they are forced to live a pretentious life
where they cannot express their emotions like others. In addition
to this
, the physical appearance of celebrities has to be perfect too, and for this
several people
undergo surgeries to enhance their beauty. However
, these surgeries are not always successful
To conclude
, a celebrity gains various benefits such
as fame and lots of money, although
these are not sufficient for a healthy and happy life
. Furthermore
, their life
is full of stress and burdensome. Thus
, I believe that being famous is more disadvantageous.Submitted by sugandha Angiras on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contributes to the overall argument and that the essay flows logically from one point to the next.
task achievement
Provide a more balanced view by acknowledging some benefits of being a celebrity before focusing on the drawbacks. Additionally, clearly address the prompt by stating your position in the introduction and conclusion.