These days, people in some countries are living in a throw away society which means people use things in a short time then throw them away.causes and problems

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As we live in a fast-paced
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
and everything
seems
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seem
to change inevitably with the person
your
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
are with or with the things you own. In other countries they call it a throw away society because everyone uses things in a short span of time. I will discuss the causes and problems associated with it on
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essay.
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, people doesn't seem like to have contentment, at some point we aim for the better, we look for a change and which is normal. Like fast fashion where a certain design or style will be
in
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on
trend for only a short period and causes a pile of clothes in the
closet
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closet, then
then
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later on will be thrown
away which
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away, which
is an added garbage and it is not good for the environment unless we recycle and make use of the clothes we never get to use anymore.
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, as technology upgrades every year there is a frequent
turn over
the ratio of the number of workers that had to be replaced in a given time period to the average number of workers
turnover
of gadgets as well. Apple Incorporated
have
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has
a yearly release of their updated and upgraded mobile phone line and due to its social status, consumers are still buying regardless of the high price. While everyone is using the latest phone, you would want for yourself as
well even
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well, even
if it is unnecessary to have. To conclude, living in a society of having a fast fashion and the release of latest gadgets every year are factors which
causes
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cause
people to use things in a short period of time.
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