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You are due to move into a rented apartment next week but you will not be able to due to an unexpected problem. Write a letter to the property manager. In your letter 1) Explain the situation 2) Describe your problems 3) Tell him/her when you think you can move in Write at least 150 words. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Ms. Williams

#move #apartment #week #property #manager #situation #ms #williams
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Dear Mr. Abdul, I regret to inform you that my relocation to your apartment will be delayed
due to
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 some circumstances that I'm facing
as of
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at
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 the moment. I am your new tenant who
supposed
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is supposed
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 to move
in
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into
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 your flat in Al Bafta Plaza,room 103 in seven days. I got
stucked
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stuck
 in the Philippines
due to
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an unforseen
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unforseen
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unforeseen
 typhoon,
because
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and because
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 of that, all flights
had been
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 cancelled.
According to
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 the news, unstable weather
condition
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 will
last
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 for a week.
Hence
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, I cannot tell
the
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you the
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 exact date of my flight and relocating to your flat might be delayed for a few days. I will keep in touch with you and let you know once
flights
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 are ready for departure. Upon reaching Dubai, I can relocate to your flat the next day. Hoping for your kind understanding. Please feel
to
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free to
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 reach me
thru
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through
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 WhatsApp at 056789065 for any clarifications. Yours Faithfully, Jane Lopez
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task achievement
To further improve, consider offering alternative solutions or requesting guidance from the property manager on how to proceed. This can make your letter more proactive and solution-oriented.
coherence and cohesion
Although your letter has a clear structure, enhancing transitions between paragraphs could further improve the flow of information. Consider using phrases that smoothly lead the reader from one point to the next.
task achievement
You did an excellent job in describing the reasons for your delayed move and proposed a clear, albeit uncertain, timeline for your new move-in date.
task achievement
Your letter remains polite and professional throughout, which is suitable for communication with a property manager.
coherence and cohesion
Your use of paragraphs to separate different ideas - explaining the situation, describing your problem, and mentioning your new move-in estimate - makes the letter easy to follow.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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