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Writing Samples
Band 8

A museum near your house is looking for people to do part-time vountary/unpaid work. you would like to do some voulntary work at the museum. write a letter to the museum director to apply for voluntary work in letter. explain why you want to do voluntary work at museum. describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter intent to apply for volunteer work as a part-time.
Additionally
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, I am looking forward to
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 kind of work , so I can get a good experience
besides
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 my studies and it’s really fascinating to guide visitors on drawing and folks.
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, from my perspective, I am suitable for
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 role
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 the skills and qualities I have which range from multitasking, and good customer service skills to sufficient knowledge about art pieces. Currently, I am enrolling in an art course , sometimes we get an opportunity to work on some specific tools which would be beneficial for me as well.
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, I am solely available on weekends for the whole day
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 I have an academic schedule during weekdays. Interestingly, I am having a summer break which lasts up to 3 weeks , I would be very grateful if you could allow me to do some extra hours. I hope I will get a positive response from your side. Yours faithfully Kirandeep Kaur

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task achievement
In your response, you effectively addressed the key points but could provide more specific examples or details in some areas. For instance, mentioning particular tasks or responsibilities you would like to undertake could strengthen your response further.
coherence cohesion
Some paragraphs could be more distinct to ensure each one covers a single idea or point. Consider breaking down your reasons for volunteering and your availability into separate paragraphs for clarity and impact.
task achievement
The letter uses a polite and suitable tone that matches the purpose of the application, making it appropriate for the recipient. The use of respectful and formal language adds professionalism to your letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing segments of your letter are well-structured, including a respectful salutation and a closing that clearly indicates your desire for a positive response.

Contractions

Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time volunteer
  • cultural heritage
  • community engagement
  • museum curator
  • customer liaison
  • public speaking
  • team collaboration
  • scheduling availability
  • artifact preservation
  • educational workshops
  • multilingual communication
  • curatorial assistance
  • event coordination
  • visitor services
  • exhibit maintenance
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