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Some people believe that the best way to increase the road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars

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Some people think that the minimum legal
age
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 for driving license should be grown in order to increase the
road
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safety
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.
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 people believe that the best way to improve the
road
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safety
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 is to grow the
age
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limit
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 for driving, I completely disagree with
this
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 opinion. On the one hand, there are several arguments why the
age
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limit
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 for driving cars should be increased.
Firstly
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, that the government should go up the minimum
age
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limit
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 for driving cars because the young develop bad driving habits and forget vital skills
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 they come across car accidents.
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, the number of the youngest, who blamed on auto accidents is
grow
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growing
 significantly every year.
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, If the minimum legal
age
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 for driving licence is gone up by the government, people may be more responsible for driving cars on
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road
Suggestion
the road
. Despite the arguments above, in my view, that increasing the
age
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limit
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 for driving cannot solve the
road
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safety
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, as We have a lot of works that improve the
road
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safety
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 like advancing the teaching system in driving courses or retaking the driving test every 5 or 10 years.
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, the government should reduce the number of cars on
road
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 and traffic congestion during rush hours, since they are very dangerous for people.
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, we can develop the
road
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safety
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 by under or above bridges and repair old roads. In conclusion. In spite of the fact that some people, support for growing the
age
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limit
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 for driving cars, I still disagree with
this
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 assertion.
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