Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce these increasing levels of crime. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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nowadays
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Nowadays
, people would like to care of pets.
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Also some
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Also, some
people
bileve
accept as true; take to be true
believe
routine medical test
Suggestion
a routine medical test
is necessary for
animels
a living organism characterized by voluntary movement
animals
,
howover
despite anything to the contrary (usually following a concession)
however
others are
againt
in contact with
against
it. In my perspective, it would have the most advantage for both of them. People
usaully
under normal conditions
usually
have different views. Some people think it could have a
hight
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
high
cost and their family
can not
can not
cannot
affort
be able to spare or give up
afford
it.
Animels
Suggestion
Animals
Enemies
Enemas
are not
importante issue
Suggestion
the important issue
important issue
impotent issue
unimportant issue
for
socities
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
societies
.
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this
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This
ideas
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idea
could Cause their death.
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on
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On
the other hand, people think human
are
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is
responsible about
animels
a living organism characterized by voluntary movement
animals
animes
enemas
.
Also
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animels
a living organism characterized by voluntary movement
animal
communities are created by them. I had seen they try to support
animels
a living organism characterized by voluntary movement
animals
. For
instand
an occurrence of something
instance
instant
, if they found
a
Suggestion
an
illness dog
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illness, dog
, they would help he or she.
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Also they
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Also, they
are used to give them foods. I personally think,
animels
a living organism characterized by voluntary movement
animals
have
big role
Suggestion
a big role
in our lives.
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Moreover there
Accept comma addition
Moreover, there
are same ill
betwen
internal to, involving members of (a group of people)
between
animels
a living organism characterized by voluntary movement
animals
animal
and human. I had read
some thing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
about them. Test and Vaccination could help us. In
conclution
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conciliation
consolation
,
animels
a living organism characterized by voluntary movement
animals
animes
enemies
are so lovely. They are like a baby All of people that care for pets believe
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people
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People
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should support
should be supported
them.
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