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It was predicted that people in the 21st century would have much more free time than in the past. To what extent has this prediction come true ?

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With the advancements in technology and rapid industrialization, people in
this
 generation have lots of
time
 on their hands. In my opinion,
this
 was predicted accurately and I totally agree that 21st
century
 citizens can do more things they desire than the past generation. The internet changed
the
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billions of lives with
the
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 vast resources. Information on almost everything is available and accessible to everyone. Earlier it used to take
many a days
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many days
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 or even months to know something as either we need to get in touch with the expert or read books available in limited editions where
as
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 now it is possible in a fraction of
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seconds
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.
For instance
, research from
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Cambridge mentioned that on
an
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average, details for
this
century
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 available in 10 minutes compared to the 10 days in the previous
century
.
Hence
,
this
 way the current generation has got an abundance of
time
. Transportation transformed the world. Across the globe, people can reach
to
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any destination within a few hours which was almost impossible earlier. There are many modes of travel like airways, metros, railways, bullet trains, trams, scooters and cars which
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 us
in reaching
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 faster.
For example
, Delhi to Kochi in India would take 20 days of the walk, but with the help of
plane
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 it is 5 hours away.
This
 clearly conveys that with these improvements
this
century
 people can save lots of their precious
time
 for other activities.
To conclude
, it is inevitable that
this
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century
 folks can do multiple things than their ancestors in the same period because of many technological advancements.
This
 essay discussed how the internet and travel booms have given more free
time
 for
this
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21st
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century
 citizens.
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