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the use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a common belief that electronic media have a great role in our life nowadays because it is very convenient, modern and so on.
However
, I firmly believe that may influence our daily
lifestyle
Accept comma addition
lifestyle, such
such
 as personal relationships with other people.
To begin
 with, people communicate by sending messages on electronic media
instead
 of talk and speak
face
 to
face
. It makes distant between everybody farther and farther.
For instance
, everybody found it difficult to stop when browsing the Internet, and even chose to continue browsing rather than spending time with their partners. On top of that excessively using electronic media could reduce communication skills. Indeed, people do not use body language, which makes it difficult to explain their own thoughts when facing to
face
.
Consequently
, due to fewer interactions, people would
face
 the risk of lacking confidence which makes them scared of public speaking. In conclusion, communicating through electronic media can,
therefore
, cause some problems between people and it
can not
can not
cannot
 replace meeting and talking
face
 to
face
.
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