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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer want to became teacher, particularly in secondary school. what are the reason for this, and how could the proble, be solved.

#countries #teacher #school #reason #proble
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A generation ago, teaching in high school was popular job.
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HOWEVER IN
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HOWEVER, IN
 some countries
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 is true still and there are a few young people who wants to be a
teacher
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 in secondary school. In
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 essay I will look at the reason for
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 and propose some solutions. One of the main causes of the problem is a
teacher
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's salary is lower than many jobs. Our young people see
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 and do not want to be a
teacher
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. It is not fair because they
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 almost every day and they get a low level of income. The
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 reason for
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 is the behaviour of pupils.
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, the don't do their homework and teachers get angry every day.
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, if they don't sit quiet, and do not do class
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, the
teacher
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 will yell at a student and will be angry during the day. Another reason for
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 problem is that, teachers have a lot of
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,
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, paper
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, class
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 and different kind of
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. While they do their job, they can't do with time in their housework or be with their family. Teachers get angry, and they are everyday in stress,
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 their health is not good. And they can be easily ill than other people who works at another job. To sum up, teaching has become less popular, because of salary, students behave, and due to a lot of
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. In my view if parents will take it seriously
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 problem will be solved.
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