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Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care. But some say that walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Nowadays people are becoming more and more
health
 conscious, and are
therefore
 inclined to develop their energy through their physical exercise. Many go to gymnasium to work out using machines, while others just maintain a physical active lifestyle by walking and climbing stairs. In
this
 essay I shall discuss both the perspectives of the arguments in depth. There are many advantages of going
gym
 and
health
 club centre. The instructor in
such
 places can guide you depending on your level of fitness and age.
In addition
, gyms and
health club centre
Suggestion
the health club centre
health club centres
 gives you the motivation and atmosphere needed for
such
 physical fitness. Today's lifestyles are sedentary, and whatever walking or using the stairs we do, we cannot fulfil our body's needs of the exercise. Let us consider one example, when we go to gyms, we see other people exercising over there, which gives you the impetus to work out.
Finally
, the equipment and guided environment, there makes the workout easier.
On the other hand
, some find impractical to take out time and go to a separate place to do physical exercise. They believe that
health
 can be maintained by just grabbing simple
day
 to
day
 physical activities. They advocate that without going to
gym
 and
health
 clubs their physical fitness can be maintained.
For instance
, they walk over a short distance as well as briskly climb the staircase and avoid the elevator.
This
, in itself, has a great advantages too. It saves additional time and expenditure needed to go to gyms. After considering the perspectives of both approaches, I believe that physical activity, coupled with a
day
 or two per week in
gym
Suggestion
the gym
a gym
 is ideal. One cannot depend on just a routine physical activity. Joining the
gym
 just for the weekends would make the weekends something to look forward to, and one can focus those muscles or areas of the body, which are not touched by simple
day
 to
day
 physical activities.
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