A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they  should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion؟

People are calling into question that human have not any right to endangered animals in order to
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achieve
their goals. While some advocate the idea that the prime candidate
to
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for
meeting the needs is that employing animals. Both sides of argument present rational points, which will be elaborated in
this
essay. On the one hand, no one can deny the fact that animals have their right to live.
That is
to say, owing to have intellect and logic, human should not be destroyed or damaged their
life
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lives
.
Consequently
, by hurting
them we
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them, we
easily put their generation and survive into
jeopardy which
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jeopardy, which
can be followed by extinction. Take Iranian Cheetah which are may
hunted
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hunt
for leather production as an example;
this
can be the root of being endangered.
On the other hand
, another compelling argument which is defined by supporters of employing animals in order to accommodate the needs is that we do not have any other choices to live without using them in different aspects of life. To put it another way, the most axiomatic reason is that researchers laid the groundwork for new
scientic
of or relating to the practice of science
scientific
scents
results which may
leads
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lead
to producing important drugs for specific diseases by experiment on them in labs. A good illustration of
this
is that,
acheived
to gain with effort
achieved
significant finding, scientist through testing on diabetic
rats which
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rats, which
it is highly likely to be controlled. To sum up, there are logical points on both sides;
however
, I am of the opinion that the growth of
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the sciences
and human's
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survives
are depend on animals even knowing that they have the right to life.
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