IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #boys #girls #schools #benefit
A fair amount of people believe that boys and girls should study at the institution, which provide segregated campuses for both the
gender
. While others have the opposite mindset, that co-education has significant benefits to the students. As far as my opinion is concerned, I believe that studying together, despite of the
gender
; have more benefits as compared to separate schools. The advocate of
this
 believe that the foremost advantage of having different campuses for each
gender
 results in a less rate of violence and rape cases. To illustrate, temptation between the opposite genders is lessen and due to which
such
 abusive acts does not cross the mind of the student. Not only
this
, but it results in higher concentrations toward the studies.
For example
, Saudi Arabia is being always criticized for being strict regarding separate institutions, but we can see that it has less abusive cases as compared to European countries and their graduates are more intelligent.
In contrast
 to above viewpoint, we observed that mix school, having both
gender
Suggestion
genders
, has led to the more personality development of a person and diversity has led to better career growth.
For instance
, when boys and girls study together, they came to know about challenges how to deal with the opposite sex, which benefit them in a workplace as well.
Thus
, it will lead to successful careers for both
sex
Suggestion
sexes
, as the tolerance to face each other’s different view will be increased by studying at a same institute. To sum up, divided educational institutes and co-education have their own merits in the form of less offensive environment and career development respectively.
However
, I believe that the advantage co-education brings to society or an individual are manifold.
Submitted by YTAH on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
What to do next:
Look at other essays: