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It has been observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects at university. What do you think are the causes of the problem? What are the effects on society

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Nowadays, It is getting common in most of the countries, students are enrolling in myriad
degree
 courses other than
science
 discipline.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons and its consequence in
further
 paragraphs.
To begin
,
Science
 is quiet complex subject to understand and needs lots of efforts and years to study before getting any job.
For instance
, a student has to spend around five to six years in
degree
 courses to acquire master skills and
then
 he can apply for a decent paying job, The other reason is, an individual interest, where most of the people like to follow their passion as a career so they can enjoy their work.
For example
, if an individual has been getting training in music from the high school and found himself really talented, indeed he would like to follow his career in the same
field
 by getting only some years of professional course. It is worldwide accepted that most of the technological innovations are done by the people from
science background
Suggestion
a science background
.
In addition
, technology is still evolving and still needs a lot of fresh ideas in
this
field
.
Thus
, the young minds of graduates can help in better ways to provide innovative thoughts.
Nevertheless
, less people enrolling in
science
degree
 will create a scarcity of fresh minds who can give a different direction altogether to the world of technology. In a nutshell,
science
 is a
field
 which requires extensive prerequisite knowledge and for that
degree
 is mandatory to complete from the university to get a job in respective
field
.
This
also
 needs lots of money to invest which is not viable for many people and other areas which are creative gravitates people more as they can explore it from an early age and
also
 choose it as a career.
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