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For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#school #children #teachers #influence #intelligence #development #parents
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Now-a-day
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, most people work out for their Fitness and well-being through daily Exertional drilling, aerobics, and
taking
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Healthy food. They
also
 use prophylactically Traditional remedies or modern Multivitamin tablets to improve their health. But, a few numbers of people
also
 think that if You follow the rules of ordinary
life
 you will be as fit as a fiddle.
This
 topic will Discuss both sides of arguments in depth. It is our belief that he who has health has Hope and he who has hope has Everything.
In addition
, fitness starts in your head, you Must choose to eat clean, exercise regularly, And treat your body with respect.
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, human Bodies are designed for regular physical Activity. if you take a balanced diet, you will take every
Nutrients
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 that’s necessary for daily routine Work .
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, a glass of milk with two
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Eggs are perfect breakfast which can energize The person until
lunch time
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. But it is
also
 true that
the
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exceptional body Movement In
morning
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 can cause fatigue
, Exhaustion
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and exhaustion
, and drain
whole
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day
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 energy. Even though, you Can be addicted to your sports work. In
couple
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 Of days, you can fed up
from
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 your habitual Chores. By the use of orthodox or current Precautionary therapy, you can get the side
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 of overdose or reaction
by
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 drugs.
While
 some individuals believe that if we go On with normal
life
 guidelines,
then
 we can Enjoy adequate health and proficient Strength. Because you stay away from
busy
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Life
 schedule,
entertained
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 by your favourite Food, and have more fun time with your Friends and family.
On the contrary
,
the
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 simple lifestyle Can Cause
lack
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 of access to material resources, Inadequate or poor quality social
Relationship
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, and deprivation of services And amenities. So, it is concluded after
long
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 discussion that bodybuilding, Nutritious meals, and cautionary treatment are ideal steps
of
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healthy
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Life
 but
it
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 can tire out and wear down your ambitious motives
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foundational role
  • structured influence
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • appetite for learning
  • curriculum
  • learning styles
  • socialize
  • cooperate
  • navigate social norms
  • underestimated
  • role models
  • confined
  • academic year
  • life lessons
  • formative years
  • moral and behavioral development
  • supportive home environment
  • reinforcing
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