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These days, many children have difficulty paying attention and concentrating in their classes at school. What are reasons for this? How can it be dealt with?

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Problems with paying
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 and concentrating have a plenty of modern pupils in their classes at school. There are several reasons behind short
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 span and not long-lasting focusing.
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 essay will examine some evident concerns about it and suggest possible solutions. It goes without saying that parents and teachers are facing with the problems of short
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 and low concentrating of their children. There are two main factors which make a lot of distractions. The
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 one is gadget devices. The modern phones and laptops let kids gain access to plenty of entertainment content which they find much more interesting so that they spend school time watching internet videos and playing games. The
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 cause is indulgent adults. Most of us are role models for them and they simply copy us in a direct way. While setting up examples whereas wasting time on the internet would be normal behaviour,
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 issue is going to only increase. Tackling these concerns involve several possible solutions. The
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 one is banning electronic devices during school lessons.
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 measure will significantly improve kids' ability controlling their
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 and concentration due to the fact that they won't be able to use them. A good decision of a role model is changing public' mindset. Parent, particularly fathers, should show that they set goals and achieve them by focusing on and paying reasonable time on it. After giving these questions some serious thought, we can state that even though many children have problems with an
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 span and concentration there are some effective solutions
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 as forbidding gadgets and showing that great achievements are reached by concentrating and focusing on a deal.
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