In the past,most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everything else.Nowadays,most people live in large cities where they know only a few people in their area.What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in small community?

To commence with
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there are many
drawbacksof
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drawbacks of
staying in
small community
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small communities
a small community
.
Firstly
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whom masses live in village that folks
can not
can not
cannot
take that facility which they take in cities
such
as good education
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hospitality
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,
transportation and many more
Secondly
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,
almost all
person
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people
persons
want to get branded product but that goods are not available in the countryside as that area is not completely
develop
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developed
developable
developing
.
Furthermore
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numerous
induviduals
a human being
individuals
face problem regarding
water
.Almost
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in all
villages many
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villages, many
hazardous diseases disperse from
water
since
water
mostly fill with germs due to increasing pollution.To cite an example
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According to survey
report which
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report, which
was done in the
last
year in India, 80% residents of villages were sick from polluted
water
when they used for daily purposes.
Therefore
village
is not develop
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has not developed
is not developed
doesn't develop
does not develop
area for living for
upcoming generation
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upcoming generations
the upcoming generation
.
On the other hand
, despite having many demerits of living in small
communities but
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communities, but
some merits
can not
can not
cannot
be ignored.In all villages
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almost all people live in gathering They ever ready to help each other.
Most important factor
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The most important factor
is all the festivals are celebrated together by all multitudes.
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they have less attitude towards
anothers especially with
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another, especially with
another especially with
unknown person. In conclusion
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although
some benefits
to live
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live
in villages
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negative sides are more and can not be neglected. So every person
want
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wants
to live in large cities where they can set their future and improve the standard of living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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