It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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It is vital children are taught about right and wrong things in life when they are younger and be punished to learn. I totally agree with

this

opinion but

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opinion, but

depends on the punishment and the impact in

positive way

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a positive way

positive ways

. In my view, children are ready to learn since they are born. So it is an important responsibility of parents to give their kids proper life lessons and teach good attitudes.

In addition

, acquire what is good and bad, help children to

formed

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form

their personality and being a better human.

For example

, we parents try to teach the children honesty and prevent lying, we all were told a story of lying shepherd and the consequence of his lying.

Therefore

, if children lie, punishment should be applied, which can be a stop playing a

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

game or watching a cartoon.

On the other hand

, some people think children must have their own freedom and should not be dictated about good and bad. They should do whatever they want with no punishment.

For example

, if children have a lot of chocolates and do not brush their teeth, let them see the result by having a toothache and feel the impact of their acts,

however

, there

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are

a lot of pain and dangers

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their health. But they will learn chocolates are not good and brushing teeth is essential. All in all,

although

giving a freedom of choice to children might help them to think and gain experience about right and wrong by themselves, I strongly believe children in early age should learn correct and incorrect

behaviors

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

to have a great mental fundamental. They need their parent’s direction to be in a safe and great way.

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Moral development
Positive reinforcement
Negative reinforcement
Behavioral psychology
Disciplinary methods
Corporal punishment
Psychological effects
Authoritative parenting
Permissive parenting
Behavioural correction
Ethical considerations
Legal frameworks
Cognitive development
Social norms
Character building
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Pro-social behavior
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