Space travel to the Moon is often cited as one giant leap for mankind. Yet some people argue that this achievement made little difference to our daily lives. What is your opinion?
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Task Response
You have presented a clear response to the prompt and addressed both sides of the argument. However, your thesis statement could be more concise and clearer. Try to avoid repetition in your introduction and ensure that your position is clearly stated.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your arguments effectively.
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You have provided relevant points supporting both sides of the argument, showing a balanced approach to the topic.
Word Count
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