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Some people think that resources should be spent on protecting wild animals, while others think those would be better used for the human population. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there is a growing debate on whether the government should spend resources on wildlife protection or human welfare. While, there are some good reasons to allocate
this
money
 to
wild animal protection
Suggestion
a wild animal protection
, I strongly believe that humans should be our
first
 priority. On the one hand, there are various reasons why people claim that resources should be spent on animal conservation. The
first
 reason is wild animals are part of our ecosystem and if we want to guarantee our future life on
this
 planet, we should protect endangered animals from extinction.
For example
, there are numerous studies that have shown that if we loss some certain specie of animals, it would affect our whole agricultural industry. The
next
 reason would be
this
 obvious and undeniable fact that humans have been destroyed and damaged the environment considerably;
therefore
, it is our responsibility to curb the environmental issues that we have made, by spending
money
 to protect our wild animals.
For instance
, we can prevent wild animal extinction by investing
money
 on studies that are about their estrous cycle and reproduction pattern.
On the other hand
, despite these arguments, I believe that human’s life matters most.
For instance
, resources could be spent on saving millions of humans’ lives. Providing
money
 for children's vaccination projects seems more important to me, rather than spending
money
 on exotic animal death reasons studies;
thus
, there is a noticeable number of children's deaths due to various infectious diseases annually, which could be prevented by a simple vaccine. In conclusion, some people who argue that government should spend resources on wild animal protection;
however
, I personally believe that addressing human problems should be considered
first
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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