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Some people think that students at school and university can learn more from teachers and lessons than from TV and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The rapid progression of the internet has paved the way for distance learning.
However
, it is still considered by many people that students can learn better from traditional methods like teachers and lessons than modern methods
such
 as TV and internet. I completely agree that traditional ways have more impact on students because teachers can stimulate interest and teach according to the need of students.
Firstly
, it is an undeniable fact that interested students learn better and perform better. A student studying by himself through the internet and TV may get bored and stop studying but
on the other hand
, learning from teachers and lessons students can interact with each other and learn in groups. It helps them to stay focused, motivated and at the same time their doubts can be cleared immediately. According to a
survey 90
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survey, 90
% of students concentrate better in the
present
Suggestion
presence
 of a teacher.
Secondly
, teachers do not only teach they observe their students as well. They can identify the
week
wanting in physical strength
weak
 points and the need of a student. It is often noticed that teachers modify their lessons according to the need of
class
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a class
 and generate new strategies to teach. The teacher can provide a faster and simpler way to present information to the students. They can come down to the level of a student and so are definitely better than computers.
In addition
, teachers are role models for students.
Finally
, in my opinion, no doubt TV and the Internet are very educative these
days but
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days, but
 students definitely learn more from the teachers. Technology can never replace teachers and lessons.
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