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Some people think the recent increasing cheap air travel brings benefits, while other people think it has drawbacks to the environment involves resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some would argue that there are lots of pros to the declining rate of flight tickets.
While
 other say that, the cons outweigh the advantages because they can be a threat to the environment.
This
 essay will shed light on why down rates of airbuses can lead to trouble than comfort. It is thought that cheaper plane tickets will bring comfort and make the journey less time-consuming for a plethora of individuals.
In other words
, as flights are more speedy than other modes of transport, lower prices can benefit residents to travel to every corner of the world rapidly and with less effort.
For example
, in a recent interview on the News a famous diva, Priyanka Chopra Jonas confessed that how she attended three big events in various nations just because of flights in just two days.
On the other hand
, those low-price flights would be proven so expensive in the future. By that, it means,
this
 airplane releases CFC [chlorofluorocarbon] into the environment, which is not good for nature, nor for human beings. Electronic devices like AC, fridges, and other vehicles are the major cause of booming
air
 pollution and global warming.
For instance
, a recently published article in the well-known magazine called 'Green Peace' claims that only
air
 travel causes 15% of
air
 pollution by emission of harmful gases into the
air
, which are responsible for some lung diseases as well.
To conclude
, saving money and a comfortable lifestyle play crucial roles in one’s life, but I truly believe that if it costs you your Health,
then
 it is expensive.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure smooth flow between paragraphs by using more linking words and phrases.
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Provide more examples and explanations to strengthen your arguments.
Task Achievement
Try to use more formal language and avoid using colloquial expressions like 'a famous diva'.
Task Achievement
The essay clearly presents both views regarding cheap air travel.
Coherence and Cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present and well-framed.
Task Achievement
Relevant example provided about Priyanka Chopra Jonas attending multiple events using air travel.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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