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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The two maps compare the structure of a
university’s
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university
sport
 centre
at
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of
 the present and its planned changes after reconstruction. Overall, the
sport
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 is planned to be expanded significantly towards the east and west. More amenities are going to be provided, diversifying the recreational activities of users. Now, after entering the
sport
 centre through a main entrance in the south, there is a reception right opposite the entrance. In the heart of
this
 centre, there is a 25m-long pool with a seating area in the east, a changing room in the west and a gym right behind it. A range of outdoor courts
lie
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lies
in
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on
 both
side
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sides
 of the main building. The future plan mostly shows no change in the existing facilities, apart from the widening of the gym towards the east and the destruction of outdoor courts. On the right of the entrance, the plan after redevelopment shows the emergence of a cafe and a changing room. In the same direction, a
sport
 hall will be added, together with two dance studios in the
further
 east. On the opposite direction, a sports shop is going to be erected, with another nearby changing room. A striking feature in the
second
 layout is the construction of a leisure
poor which
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poor, which
 is much larger than the old indoor one.
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