It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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It is vital children be taught about right and wrong things in life when they are in early age.

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, punishment should be applied by any bad

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and effective. In my view, children are ready to learn since the moment

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why it is a significant responsibility of parents to give their kids proper life lessons according morals.

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, acquiring what is good and bad,

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children personalities and beliefs.

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, some people think children must have their own freedom and should not be dictated about good or bad.

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, they should do whatever they want with no fine.

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, they should learn on their own experience.

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, if a child is rude and disrespectful, when be rejected by their friends, they must take responsibility of their manners and find a solution to get back their friends.

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giving a freedom of choice to children might help them to think deeply and gain experience about right and wrong by themselves, I strongly believe they

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Topic Vocabulary:

Moral development
Positive reinforcement
Negative reinforcement
Behavioral psychology
Disciplinary methods
Corporal punishment
Psychological effects
Authoritative parenting
Permissive parenting
Behavioural correction
Ethical considerations
Legal frameworks
Cognitive development
Social norms
Character building
Restorative practices
Authoritarian approach
Constructive criticism
Pro-social behavior
Conditioning

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