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The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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It is true that the traditional family mealtime is becoming a thing of the past. There are some reasons which can be put forward to explain
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, and there are some significant impacts on family life and health. There are two obvious reasons why families no longer share mealtimes as they used to do in the past.
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, children are often too impatient to eat at the table, and parents sometimes allow them to have their meal in front of the TV or sitting in front of the computer.
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, the close-knit family is disappearing in the face of economic pressures. In single-parent households, or in the family with working mothers, it can be almost impossible to arrange regular times for meals when all family is together. The consequences for family life and for health’s children are serious. From the perspective of family life, meals taken together are an important feature of a stable family background.
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 stability of family routine is an essential factor in shaping children’s personality during their formative years. Family mealtimes are a time to share news, give guidance, and to make plans together. In terms of children’s health, family meals are an opportunity to provide all family members with a healthier diet base on wholesome home-made food. Without
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 routine, children are sometimes left to have snacks or eat junk food at fast-food chains. Health consequences
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 as obesity and hyperactivity often result when youngsters fail to eat a balanced diet,
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 as used to be provided at mealtimes. In conclusion, some reasons can be identified for the decline in shared family meals and the impacts are overwhelmingly negative.
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