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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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Of late, there is a surge in the number of people, and few people think that the GM crops can be the solution
for
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to
 the rise in manufacturing of
food
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 grains.
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,
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 essay will discuss the advantage of using GM crops, and the latter half will emphasize on the downside of the same. If the nation plans to adopt the use of Genetic Modified crops, that would ensure that there is no shortage of
food
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 for the citizens.
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 idea is
helful
providing assistance or serving a useful function
helpful
 as it will maintain the supply of the
food
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constantly
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constant
, and the overall price will be reduced as minimum
maintainance
activity involved in maintaining something in good working order
maintenance
 is required for the
crop
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.
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, the amount of water and fertilizer required is less as compared to the naturally grown crops.
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,
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 will minimize the price of the
crop
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 and ensure affordability. Using the GM
crop
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 possesses several disadvantages too. The main drawback is the detrimental
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 to health. Consumption of these
type
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types
 of crops can lead to allergy and in rare cases, cancer too.
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, if a farm only grew Genetic Modified crops,
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 a lot of health related cases could be reported from the people who tend to have a weak immune system. So, people would be reluctant to eat the GM
crop
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. To conclude, it is beneficial for the nation to consume GM crops as there would be plenty
food
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 for everyone. But, it is
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 a bane for the well-being of the people who are medically not fit.
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