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Some people believe that technology has made their lives easier, whereas others believe that it has negative effects. Give ur opinion.

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Technology
 plays a vital role in
this
 modern era in one's life. A few people argue that
technology
 has made their lives simpler and easier, whereas others consider that
this
 technological advancement has more negative and dangerous effects. I believe and opine that Life without
technology
 is even
hard
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harder
 to be imagined. There are numerous reasons in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of my stance. The most preponderant one being that these days an individual is fully dependent on
technology
 for all his needs, from the start of the day till its end, whether it is attending meetings on
phone
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the phone
 or remain socially connected with dear ones. It has already influenced our lives in
such
 a way that it has actually become quite difficult to stay without
such
 advancement.Testified from the fact, a person spends around 6 hours a day on
phone
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the phone
, whereas earlier it was just 2 hours a day. So it can be said that
this
 advancement has definitely an effect on us. Another pivotal aspect is that
this
technology
 has
infact
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in fact
 made our lives quite easier by making use of
this
 IOT concept,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e.
internet
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Internet
 of things. Everything is being connected to us via
this
 technique. Not only can we switch on or off our AC using
phone
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the phone
phones
a phone
, but we can
also
 make use of the smart refrigerators and TV that work as per human requirements.
Besides
, its importance in reducing our work load and time
can not
can not
cannot
 be denied.
For instance
, most of the houses in our nation are starting to adopt
such
 tech savvy things for the betterment. From the facts outlined above, it can be concluded that what
technology
 has offered
us especially
Accept comma addition
us, especially
 during the past few years is incredible, and has made our lives and work so simpler and easier, that it is actually quite difficult for anybody to live without it.
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