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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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These days,
education
 is a crucial factor for progress of a country and a nation. Some people think that tertiary
education
 is essential to get good earning while some the other believe that
university
education
 has more profound effects on
society
 and individuals.
This
 essay will explain both aspects of
this
 issue. On the
first
 side, it is true that people continue studying in
university
 for getting good jobs. As we know, many companies open recruiting for people who have a good qualification about themselves. Over and above, graduates from popular
university
 get more interest from companies than people come from another
university
.
University
Suggestion
The university
 will provide better opportunity for students to be employed in the quality company.
Therefore
, the graduation certificate of the
university
 would be students' qualification for being thoroughly prepared to improve their future career prospects. On the other side, there are other benefits for individuals and
society
. They can get more knowledge which they cannot find in outside
university
. It helps the student to become independent when they graduate from
university
 because they have better social skills. They can open new work alone,
such
 as building a course.
This
 example clearly that graduates have more self confidence when they study in
university
.
Secondly
,
society
 will gain from the contribution that the graduates can make to the economy. We are living in a very competitive world, so countries need educated people in order to compete and prosper. To conclude, my own view of
this
 is I believe that
although
 a main aim of
university
education
 is to get a better job.
Moreover
, if we believe about our capability, we can give more benefits for individuals and
society
.
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