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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is believed that serious social and practical problems can be caused when we are staying in a country where
foreign
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the foreign language
a foreign language
language
 is prevalent. In my opinion, speaking a non-native
language
 result in disparity with the regional
peple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
peoples
 while communicating and socializing with them.
Although
, it can
also
 provide us with an opportunity to learn a new
language
 and familiarize ourselves with it. One evident
benifit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
 of speaking
language
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a language
 apart from our mother tongue
provide
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provides
 us with an opportunity to learn a new
language
 and excel it.
Moreover
, having knowledge of a non-native
language
 can help boost our job application and provides us with more career related opportunities. To illustrate, people staying in Quebec, where
french
of or pertaining to France or the people of France
French
 is widely spoken will start learning
this
language
 because of which they will have a chance to apply for companies accepting only french speaking applicants.
On the other hand
, getting familiar with a new
language
 is not an easy task.
Initially
, when people start their journey in a new country they have to face a huge communication gap.
For instance
, when people landed there, they have to face a lot challenges with directions and what route they can take to reach their
destination but
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destination, but
 when they ask any local citizen for help they were unable to understand them and felt helpless.
Also
, these people are always considered outsiders
as a result
 of which they are not able to socialize with others and have to live an awkward life there. To conclude,
language
 is a great barrier that needs to be overcome to create a good relationship with people living in foreign countries. While living in a country where a less known
language
 is spoken, can provide you with an opportunity to learn that
language but
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language, but
initially
 creates a communication gap that requires a lot efforts to fill
this
 gap.
Moreover
, not being comfortable with other people's
language
 can make them consider you as an outsider because of which a sense of oneness can never be achieved.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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