The Growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Today online shopping become popular among the people. Some sets of group argue that increasing
rate
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rates
of it
cause
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causes
the shutdown of all shops in towns and cities. At some extent, I agree with it.
However
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However, offline
offline
shopping will never end as people need it the most. My opinion is explained
further
with reasons and examples. Nowadays, People would like to buy everything at online platform. They find it less time consuming as well as
easier task
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an easier task
to do. To illustrate, Grocery, Clothes, home decor and electronics are easily available online
in
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from
wide range of varieties.
In addition
,
this
type of shopping
also provide
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also provides
the flexibility of exchange the
product
suppose
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supposes
it is damaged or have quality issues or having other problems.
Furthermore
, people do not have to go at different shops because they find all
type
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types
of brands
at
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in
one single place.
For example
Flipkart,
amazone
(Greek mythology) one of a nation of women warriors of Scythia (who burned off the right breast in order to use a bow and arrow more effectively)
Amazon
amazon
,
pharmeasy
a retail shop where medicine and other articles are sold
pharmacy
,
myntra
a commonly repeated word or phrase
mantra
and many more sites are available.
This
sites
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site
also provide
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also provides
the different type of offers,
cashback
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cash back
and gift coupons which attract the people most. So, I agree that in future online shopping will increase as
compare
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compared
to
past
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the past
.
Nevertheless
,
offline
shopping
have
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has
their own value. Some sets of people
thing
an instance of deliberate thinking
think
that
this
shopping is
trustworthy
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more trustworthy
rather than online shopping. Another reason for people choose
offline shopping
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an offline shopping
is, delivery of
product
is at a time they do not have to wait for long days. To give a clear example, In Online shopping
product
delivery time is minimum 2 days and people have to wait for it while in local store they can buy
product
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the product
immediately. Another example is, if people need any medicines immediately so
offline
shopping is always better.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
at the
end I
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end, I
agree with
this
that
offline
shopping will never close. In conclusion,
Although
demand of online shopping is
high
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higher
nowadays, shopping from the cities and
towns
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town
town's
stores will never end as both have their own merits and demerits.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
personally agree that online shopping might be chosen
first
by
everyone but
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everyone, but
offline
shopping have
also
beneficial impact.
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