The Growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today online shopping become popular among the people. Some sets of group argue that increasing

rate

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rates

of it

cause

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causes

the shutdown of all shops in towns and cities. At some extent, I agree with it.

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However

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However, offline

offline

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shopping will never end as people need it the most. My opinion is explained

further

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with reasons and examples. Nowadays, People would like to buy everything at online platform. They find it less time consuming as well as

easier task

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an easier task

to do. To illustrate, Grocery, Clothes, home decor and electronics are easily available online

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from

wide range of varieties.

In addition

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this

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type of shopping

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also provide

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also provides

the flexibility of exchange the

product

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suppose

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supposes

it is damaged or have quality issues or having other problems.

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, people do not have to go at different shops because they find all

type

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types

of brands

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one single place.

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Flipkart,

amazone

(Greek mythology) one of a nation of women warriors of Scythia (who burned off the right breast in order to use a bow and arrow more effectively)

Amazon

amazon

pharmeasy

a retail shop where medicine and other articles are sold

pharmacy

myntra

a commonly repeated word or phrase

mantra

and many more sites are available.

This

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sites

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site

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also provide

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also provides

the different type of offers,

cashback

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cash back

and gift coupons which attract the people most. So, I agree that in future online shopping will increase as

compare

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compared

past

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the past

Nevertheless

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offline

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shopping

have

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has

their own value. Some sets of people

thing

an instance of deliberate thinking

think

that

this

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shopping is

trustworthy

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more trustworthy

rather than online shopping. Another reason for people choose

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offline shopping

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an offline shopping

is, delivery of

product

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is at a time they do not have to wait for long days. To give a clear example, In Online shopping

product

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delivery time is minimum 2 days and people have to wait for it while in local store they can buy

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product

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the product

immediately. Another example is, if people need any medicines immediately so

offline

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shopping is always better.

to a very great extent or degree

at the

end I

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end, I

agree with

this

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that

offline

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shopping will never close. In conclusion,

Although

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demand of online shopping is

high

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higher

nowadays, shopping from the cities and

towns

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town

town's

stores will never end as both have their own merits and demerits.

refers to the speaker or writer

personally agree that online shopping might be chosen

first

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everyone but

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everyone, but

offline

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shopping have

also

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beneficial impact.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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339 words

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brick-and-mortar
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retail apocalypse
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The Growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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In some cultures, people often tell children that they could achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this advice?

Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. To what extent do you agree.