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Some people believe that academic subjects such as chemistry, physics and history should be taught in schools, while others believe that students will derive more benefit from studying practical subjects, such as motor mechanics and cooking. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

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In
this
 day and age, it is not uncommon that the theoretical courses should be more focused in curriculum than the vocational training for manifold reasons.
This
 essay will try to discuss both sides of
this
 controversial issue and my perspective will be pointed out. A plausible argument which lends support to the former point of view is that the people who are equipped with fundamental knowledge will have opportunities to
pursuit
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pursue
pursuing
 the higher education. To put it another way, high level workers
such
 as doctors, engineers and scientists acquire complex understanding of specific fields.
Hence
, the high-skilled professional workforce will develop a country’s prosperity. In line with the previous idea, the
second
 argument is not less important that the scholastic topics provide crucial skills in real life.
In other words
, it derives numerous skills which are accumulated from the studying
period
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period, such
such
 as logical thinking, memory power and time management. They, in turn, may be capable of challenge in the future. Adopting a different stance, other people insist that the acquisition of additional skill sets will enable more career opportunities. Since it aids fresh graduates find jobs more easily than their academic counterparts, resulting in reducing
unemployment rate
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the unemployment rate
 and protecting people from becoming unemployed. What is more, educating practical themes
allow
Suggestion
allows
 elevate their skills and job satisfaction. To be more precise, those who are well-prepared and competent at what they do generally feel better in their jobs.
As a result
, they will achieve financial security in their early adulthood stage. In conclusion, both
point
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points
 of view have its own merits.
Therefore
, it
is depends
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depends
 on the job market and the
individuals’
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individual’s
 career path, students are able to find their mix.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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