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It was predicted that people in the 21 century would have much more free time than in the past. To what extent has this prediction come true?

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There was a prediction that modern citizens would have more free
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 in comparison with previous epochs. In
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 expectation became our reality. I assume that the prediction was quite precise because, with the appearance of technological advances, humanity has become freer from domestic chores and has more spare
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 for the other activities.
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, our ancestors spend a lot of
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 doing laundry, cleaning a house, while modern people have washing machines, vacuum cleaners, and other appliances.
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, today these items save our
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 significantly and domestic work has become more energy-efficient and less
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-consuming.
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, machines save a person’s
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 not only at home, but at work as well. They do a great deal in the industry, agriculture, or a modern office, replacing energy and
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-consuming operation by faster machine operation and procedures.
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, improvements in the transportation system and infrastructure allowed people to travel in the blink of an eye. To illustrate, in the past a journey from one country to another could take months. Meanwhile, with the appearance of aviation even more remote areas can be reached for a couple of days.
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, modern transport saves a bunch of
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 and let people travel around the world and have quality
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. Previously, the idea to visit Paris or another foreign city on the weekend could be recognized as ridiculous, today it is quite feasible and appropriate. In conclusion, I think that it was predicted accurately enough that individuals of the 21st century would have more spare
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 than it was in the past.
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 is because the invention of modern technologies and advances in transport hugely saves
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 and let the public use it for the creative process and other activities.
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