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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people buy same products anywhere in the world. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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In today's technologically developed world, all items are available
in
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at
 our fingertips and it can be bought from any nook and corner of
this
 world through various sources which can be really
impact
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impacted
 the society in a negative way. On one hand, some of them consider that, the technological development has made the world more closer. So, even if people do not travel to other countries can have their wishful items at their end.
This
 is one of the main
reason
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reasons
 why people consider it as a positive development.
However
, they do not think that, if everything available without any issues,
then
 the life can dry easily. To be more clear, if antique items of one particular nation
is
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are
availble
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
 in our homeland,
then
 there is no enthusiasm and
also
, people won't prefer to travel other homey areas.
This
 in turn can reduce the economy because, tourism will get declined. In-addition, the soveniers of various nation, is an identity,If
such
 things are available freely in our market,
then
 we would not know what importance it has on our nations and how much respect is given by the citizens.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
if every
provinces
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province
become
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becomes
 similar,
then
 the true culture, customs and traditions of the host would be lost and it can really affect the
devlopment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
 of the kingdom. In
conclsion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
consolation
,
eventhough
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even though
 the technological advancements are good for the country, availability of
eveything
all things
everything
any where
at or in or to any place
anywhere
 can really
makes
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make
 the life dull and dry. So, in future, some measure should be taken so that it would not hinder any country's identity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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